Wednesday, 12 November 2014

READ!!!!! SAMPLE RESPONSE for Exam Section 2 (Blog, Comment and Tweet)


Sample Response for Section 2 of the 2014 year 10 English exam

·       Responses are written in black text.

·       Instructions are printed in grey

 

 

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Practice Exam Follows

SECTION 2

Using Language to Persuade

 



ENGLISH STUDENTS

 

Instructions:

Read the Background information paragraph titled 'A Matter of Life or Death ; then complete the  following 3 writing tasks:

 

a)    Write a blog where you express your point of view in relation to the issue covered in the paragraph.

Your blog must contain the following parts:

Ø  Your contention. e.g. Your point of view/opinion.

Ø  A minimum of two (2) supporting arguments. e.g. The reasons for that opinion.

Ø  A minimum of two (2) persuasive techniques. e.g. Emotive language; inclusive language; an appeal; alliteration and/or use a statistic or quote an expert.

Word limit: 200-250 words / 1 page.

Your blog name: Freeload-Nation

Target Audience: General Australian Public

e.g. The people you are attempting to persuade/convince.

Barry Cassidy’s Blog- Freeload-Nation

As a hardworking Australian I have a hard time accepting that people who aren’t working should be gifted tax payer money. I earn over 250 000 dollars. I work hard for this money. Over 60 hours a week hard in a career I have spent a quarter of a century developing. And I haven’t put in these hours so the money can be wasted on people who aren’t contributing to society, but are instead raping our society and exploiting hard working people such as myself.

Why should someone be handed almost $600 to sit on their arse playing computer games and probably smoke marijuana. Make these people work for the tax payer. Have them clean the streets, paint public infrastructure, complete menial duties and if they don’t like it, don’t pay them.

We live in the real world and the real world doesn’t tolerate free-loaders; accept it does, it does to the tune of $600. $600 worth of my hard work, sweat and tears. This needs to stop, society can't afford it and I refuse to support the lazy, the insolent and the bum.

Australian society has proudly been built on the guts, sweat and hard work of the citizens before us. Australia is the land of the free, a country where we help each other out, where we have a fair dinkum crack. But the foundations of hard work that have built this beautiful country are being compromised by a system that supports the lazy and the free loader. I’m happy to help a brother out, but I have no room for free-loaders.

 

 

b)    Write a comment that either supports or disagrees with your blog.

This comment must be as another person and must contain the following parts:

Ø  It must contain a contention. e.g. That person’s point of view/opinion.

Ø  It must contain a supportive or contradictory argument. e.g. Their reason why your reasons for your point of view/opinion is/are right or wrong.

 

Word limit: 100-150 words

Your comment name: Eddieperfect

EddiePerfect

Barry Cassidy, I read your blog with keen interest. It is intriguing that you say all people receiving the ‘dole’ are freeloading bogans. I am a 26 year-old art-music teacher; without the dole I would be forced to question the reality of pursuing a dream I have spent 7 years and over 30 thousand dollars working towards. The teaching industry is tight and the job market is tough so I would perhaps have to settle for a menial admin, retail or hospitality job.

Why should society lose my expertise (my band was nominated for an ARIA) because certain individuals have exploited the system. I need that money so I can survive financially while I job search. The real issue isn’t the dole itself, it’s the individuals who exploit it. You say the system supports the ‘freeloading bogan.’ No! It supports and is required by the out-of-work. Without it I and many other hard working Australian’s would be unable to survive.

 

c)    Write a tweet that supports either point of view/opinion

 presented in part a) or part b).

This tweet must contain a high level of bias for or against a point of view/opinion.

 

Word limit: 140 characters / 20-25 words

Your twitter name: @MrMunnersdirtyrunners

Target Audience: Politicians


A Tweet from @MrMunnersdirtyrunners

We must help the unfortunate help themselves. The dole is a fresh start for many and a lifeline for all. #survive #live #educate

 

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