Revision of structure
Opening Sentence:
Outline how text 2 relates to the prompt
Supporting Idea 1:
Outline connection between extract and prompt
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Elaborate
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Evidence to support idea 1
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Explanation of evidence in relation to contention
Supporting Idea 2:
Outline connection between the wider text and the prompt
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Elaborate
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Evidence to support idea 2
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Explanation of evidence in relation to contention.
Sample: Body Paragraph 1
Prompt: People primarily become outsiders because they are different to
those around them.
In the
Simpson’s episode ‘Much Apu About Nothing’ it is suggested that fear of
difference is central to the development of both intra and inter personal
isolation. Like Anh in the Happiest Refugee, in the extract from the ‘The Simpson’s’ episode Apu suggests that he is
‘no longer an Indian living in America, but an Indian-American.’ It is not
until Apu is able to accept who he is as an individual that he allows the
society that is around him to accept both the similarities and differences in
his character. Furthermore, when the differences of ‘immigants’ are highlighted by
Mayor Quimby it provides scope for the townspeople to isolate those they see as
different. For Apu it is not until he
highlights ‘his love for this country,’ that he is able to focus on the
similarities that he has with Homer and be accepted by the Simpsons family. The
episode ends with Homer’s suggestion that these ‘aliens’ provide the
metaphorical glue within society, symbolic of the transient nature of
relationships between social groups. The episode suggests that those that
are seen as outsiders often become the fabric of an inclusive identity and thus
the only way to overcome the alienation of others is to accept difference and
embrace commonality. Moreover the sentiment conveyed throughout is that
individuals embrace each other, yet that individuals never ‘forget who [they]
are.’
