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Opening Sentence: Outline how text 2 relates to the prompt

 

Supporting Idea 1: Outline connection between extract and prompt

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Supporting Idea 2: Outline connection between the wider text and the prompt

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Prompt: People primarily become outsiders because they are different to those around them.

In the Simpson’s episode ‘Much Apu About Nothing’ it is suggested that fear of difference is central to the development of both intra and inter personal isolation. Like Anh in the Happiest Refugee, in the extract from the ‘The Simpson’s’ episode Apu suggests that he is ‘no longer an Indian living in America, but an Indian-American.’ It is not until Apu is able to accept who he is as an individual that he allows the society that is around him to accept both the similarities and differences in his character. Furthermore, when the differences of ‘immigants’ are highlighted by Mayor Quimby it provides scope for the townspeople to isolate those they see as different.  For Apu it is not until he highlights ‘his love for this country,’ that he is able to focus on the similarities that he has with Homer and be accepted by the Simpsons family. The episode ends with Homer’s suggestion that these ‘aliens’ provide the metaphorical glue within society, symbolic of the transient nature of relationships between social groups. The episode suggests that those that are seen as outsiders often become the fabric of an inclusive identity and thus the only way to overcome the alienation of others is to accept difference and embrace commonality. Moreover the sentiment conveyed throughout is that individuals embrace each other, yet that individuals never ‘forget who [they] are.’