(39/2) Sample Introduction: 'Why I won't be travelling to Indonesia.'

Due to the deaths of Bali Nine drug smuggler Andrew Chan and Mayran Sukamaran debate has raged over whether or not capital punishment is at all morally justified. In the article 'Why I won't be travelling to Indonesia' the editor argues that capital punishment is a barbaric practice that needs to be stopped. By employing an empassioned tone the editor is able to play on the moral conscience of families and parents. Encouraging the to reflect on the ethical implications capitol punishment has on humanity. Accompanying the editor's article is a photo of Andrew Chan and Mayran Sukamaran as children. In using photos of the accused as children the author is able to emphasise the notion that individuals can always achieve redemption in some way, a prospect that is removed by the finality of capital punishment.

(38/2) Sample Annotations: Andrew Charles Article

When annotating you need to focus on the following...

 

• Identifying ITACT
• Identifying Arguments
• identifying and Analysing Devices

 

Some tips to assist you in annotating...

 

• Use different coloured pens to colour code your annotations to make it easier to identify the PLTs that you are going to analyse in each body paragraph.
• Identify ITACT across the topic our your page in full sentences.
• Outline the main arguments in full sentences, ready to be placed in your essay.
• You may want to write in full sentences so that your annotations can be directly used in your essay

 

Sample annotations for the Andrew Charles article

 

(37/2) A collection of PLT Tests

The purpose of the PLT Test is to practice identifying and analysing persuasive devices. The argument is provided for you, as is three relevant text extracts, you job is to analyse each of the extract in relation to the provided argument and thus construct a LA body paragraph.

A reminder of how to analyse devices…

1. What is the technique used? (Identify or describe the technique)

2. How is the technique used? (Describe how the author employs the technique, include quote)

3. Why has the technique been used? (How and why does the PLT position the reader?)

PLT Test #1

Analyse the three text extracts from the Andrew Charles article

MA1: Charles argues that boat people are going to destroy the Aussie way of life.

1. ‘illegal boat pirates’
2. ‘Our land is girt by a wild, lawless sea.’
3. ‘I call on all Australian’s to protect our way of life’

 

PLT Test #2

Analyse the three text extracts from the Joshua Douglas article

MA1: Douglas argues that betting advertising can have an adverse effect on the futures of our children

1. 12 year old betting bandits
2. ‘Future of forgotten morals, family violence and entrenched poverty’
3. Joshua Douglas,

Werribee, Father

 

PLT Test #3

Use the quoted extracts from ‘Policy Shames Us All’ to analyse how and why language is employ in such a way to support Nguyen’s POV.

MA1: The author argues that asylum seekers are being persecuted and subjugated in their home country and they need to be protected by Australia

1. ‘As the daughter of two incredibly hard-working people.’
2. ‘Death is more appealing than staying alive in a state of horror.’
3. ‘Terrifying conditions… similar hardships… leaving your home in dangerous circumstances.’

(36/2) Sentence Starters for the Langauge Analysis Unit

Sometimes it can be difficult to find a place to start when writing an essay.

Here are some ways to begin and phrase sentences when stating a supporting argument the author uses to defend their POV on the issue:

·         The writer goes on to assert that…

·         The author opens by arguing that…

·         In a … tone, the writer declares that…

·         The writer argues that…

·         The author makes the statement that...

·         The writer argues that… which influences the reader to…

·         The author makes the suggestion that…

·         The author infers that…

Here are some ways to begin and phrase sentences when analysing how language has been used to position the reader…

·         The use of… positions the reader to share the writer’s viewpoint by…

·         [author] uses the emotive term… to describe… this could encourage readers to…

·         [author] opens by employing a [PLT] by making the suggestion that…

·         By following this [PLT1] with a [PLT2] the author is able to…

(35/2) Langauge Analysis Essay Sample #2 (Med/High)

Year 10: Language Analysis CAT Assessment

"Stop messing around with marriage. You'll miss it when it's gone."

 

Due to the increase of gay marriage equality issues that were recently discussed in  Australian media, a concern within society about whether or not homosexuals should be allowed to marry legally has risen. Addressing their opinion on the matter, writer of Daily Telegraph article, 'Stop messing around with marriage. We will miss it when it's gone.", which was published on the 22nd of March 2015, Miranda Devine argues that gay marriage being legislated, in addition to the problems of unfaithfulness in marriages, could 'destroy the pillar of society'. Devine uses a pleading and exaggerated tone to encourage parents to 'step back' and become aware of the negative impacts that allowing gays to legally marry may bring to their children and to society. An image accompanying Devine's article features a smiling family with two young boys and a mother and father who seem to be happily married, lying down in, what seems to be, a sunny park. Associating the traditional family portrait with the popular gay marriage issue, the picture depicts that possible legislation of gay marriage can threaten the stable existence of a traditional family, which Devine believes is the only way for a 'happy family' to exist. The image draws deeper into her pleading tone, which is used to appeal to family to help stop the legislation of gay marriage. This assists Devine's opinion as it may invoke feelings panic which could cause her audience to feel

Devine believes that the consequences of allowing gay marriage to occur in Australia, is that children's lives shall be broken and damaged, as well as an underclass of dysfunction, and a yawning equality in society. Devine starts her first supporting argument with her use of statistics from the recent governmental vote for whether gay marriage should be legal or not, stating that '49 percent' is now a minority of people that are accepting gay marriage, which Devine believes is a threat to a happy traditional family. Devine also includes a rhetorical question in her argument, as she uses a arrogant and insulting tone, which aimed towards homosexuals, when she asks the audience whether they are to "let same-sex advocators thin our values even more?" This would affect the intended audience, the parents of children, as Devine is appealing to their family and their values, causing them to reflect on their desire to protect their family values from what they deem is improper or a risk that may harm their children. Devine continues to assert that gay marriage should not be legislated as it could decrease the chances of children being able to achieve higher results in every measure of life. By using generalisation to identify this problem within their children, Devine strikes a worried feeling in the parents, causing them to possibly take action against the allowance of gay marriage in Australia.

Miranda Devine goes on to emphasise that society had given up their will to fight for a traditional, no gay-marriage environment. Devine opens her second supporting argument by employing an attack on society's will to fight for a better environment for their children, as explains that the 'battle' for keeping same-sex marriage illegal in Australia is difficult to 'win for conservatives' only because the 'battle for marriage was given up long ago.' With her use of an accusatory and disappointed tone, Devine triggers an emotional guilt trip within the audience, for the reason as to why they had 'given up' the fight for a future without homosexual marriage. Devine also applies an appeal to society's logic, as she reveals that a member of higher ranks, may be 'targeted' if they do not support the 'so-called gay marriage equality' that the majority have voted for. This triggers another feeling of guilt within the audience, as it presents them as a 'bully' that targets anyone that doesn't voice-out and agree with the gay-marriage equality legislation.

Devine introduces her final argument by using examples to display the fact that she believes that gay people are more courageous to stand for what they believe in. She uses an example of a protest in France, against homosexual marriage, where homosexuals actually led the way, using 'The right of children trump the right to children' as their catchphrase. By using this in her article, Devine persuades her audience to believe that even the homosexuals that she is writing about, agree to her point of view. This possibly causes her intended audience, to feel as if they are being left out if they do not agree to Devine's arguments against homosexual marriage. The image being used as accompaniment to her article, assists her perspective of the issue as she uses it to display the family traditions that 'many people' like herself, are trying to protect and persuade others to do the same.

Devine concludes her piece by describing what she believes is in the 'best interests' of society, that a man and a woman should just focus on raising healthy and responsible children, whether they be gay or straight. This also contrasts with her original statement, that gay marriage could be 'destroying the pillars of society', as well as the unfaithfulness of partners with each other. This could possibly leave the audience confused and overwhelmed with how much of a repetitive problem the legislation of gay marriage is.

(34/2) Year 10 English Cover Sheet

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Year 10 English Cover Sheet

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33/2 Analysing Images

We have learnt how to introduce images but it is also vital important that we explore how to analyse an image.

We analyse an image in much the same way as we would analyse language or a PLT. You should start by asking yourself 'Why was this image included with the article? What angle is it taking on the issue?' 'What is it specifically trying to influence your thoughts on? (Think asylum seekers 'the people' not the 'issue of asylum seekers)'

with that in mind we are essentially asking ourselves...

How has the image been constructed to maximise its emotional impact?

Sample #1

The author will use certain techniques to evoke an emotional response. This could be the subject of the image. How the subject is portrayed. How the subjects or sitting. Colour, shadow, symbol.

Below is an image of Bali9 smuggler Andrew Chan and Andrew Sukamaran. However in an attempt to evoke an emotional response the author has employed an image of the men as children. This attempts to portray the innocence of the men through associating them with their childhood selves. Furthermore they are placed in school uniforms this could cause parents to reflect on their own children and the emotional response that would come. The fact that they are wearing traditional Australian uniforms is also important because it highlights the larrikin Australianness in their past. (an appeal to nationalism)

Sample #2

This image relates to the issue of how whether or not Indigenous Australians should be given greater support by the Australian government. The editor would use this image to draw focus on the plight of Aboriginal children. By placing two naked children the reader is encouraged to see the vulnerability of the children and the aboriginal community as a whole. The fact they are naked emphasizes their humanity and humanism and could draw sympathy for the articles contention. The fact they have been placed with trash to their left and a road to the right and behind shows the dilapidation and work that is required to assist the aboriginal people. While the road could be symbolic of progress and a road to globalization and interconnectedness

Expressing our Analysis

The analysis of an image occurs in the same manner to language or a persuasive technique. You need to identify and describe the technique or element employed, describe how it has been used and how it would impact the reader in relation to the specific argument.

Sample Analysis

The author argues that the vulnerability of the Aboriginal community points to the intervention of the Australian Government. The accompanying image employs the image of two aboriginal children to emphasize what is at stake. The use of the children encourages readers to see Aboriginal children and the community as vulnerable and innocent. Parents could be encouraged to reflect on their own children and the freedoms and rights they assume in the same country as the kids in the photo.

Learning Activity

Analyse the following images in relation to the respective issues. You may use the analysis scaffolds or your own intuition.

Issue one: Due to an increase in teen alcoholism the issue of whether or not binge drinking is a problem in society has been discussed lately.

Issue two: Due to the possibility of a sex-offenders register being established the issue of whether or not sex-offenders should be placed on a publically accessible register has been discussed recently.

(32'/2) Mini Article Assessment

The TASK: Complete 2 of the three tasks below by following the instructions that proceed each article. Each piece needs to be submitted to Mr Munro however should be peer assessed within class time. 

 

 

Task 1: Mini Article #1

 

Instructions: Write a LA introduction on the article ‘Our Land is Girt by a Wild Lawless Sea

 

3 marks: Student has identified the issue and context

3 marks: Student has identified the text details, intended audience and the tone of the article

1 mark: Student had identified the author’s contention

3 marks: Student had introduced any secondary article and the contention, tone and intended audience if it differs from the primary article

 

Our Land  is Girt by a Wild Lawless Sea          1/1/2011

To the editor of the Herald Sun,

 

 

I call on all Australians to protect our way of life. A way of life that is being threatened by illegal boat pirates and mooching human cargo. My tax dollars shouldn’t go to funding the exorbitant whims of boat people who are increasingly becoming a scourge on our society. My job and indeed no Aussie job should be sacrificed so a two-buck immigrant can be given a fair go. We live in the lucky country. Let’s keep it that way.

 

Andrew Charles

Werribee, Father

 

 

 

Task #2: Mini Article #2

 

Instructions: Identify the contention and 2 supporting arguments on the article ’12 Year Old Betting Bandits’ below.

 

 

2 Marks: Student is able to identify and outline the issue and context of the article.

2 Marks: Student can identify the author's contention and express it in an appropriate manner.

6 Marks: Student can identify 2 supporting arguments and outline the argument in a full sentence that relates to the issue/contention

 

 

12 year old betting bandits

 

To the editor,

I was watching the footy with my son the other day when he tells me the ‘Pie’s are gonna win because Betsport has them at $1.58’ and that ‘we should put 100 bucks on them to pay for dinner.’ When did the financial interests of unethical betting houses trump the rights and future of our children? When does the exploitation stop? When does the government’s financial reliance end? It seems like the only interest that isn’t being considered is our children. Who will repay for the lives, families and financial future destroyed by this government cash grab? The onus is on the government and the consequence of not acting now will be a future of forgotten morals, family violence and entrenched poverty. We need to put a stop to betting during sports so that children, our future doesn’t grow up thinking betting on sports is normal. Let’s not promote a culture of addiction.

 

Joshua Douglas, 4/5/2012

Werribee, Father

 

 

 

 

Task 3: Mini Article #3

 

Identify how persuasive language is employed within the article ‘Junk Food Junkies,’ the contention and one supporting argument is supplied if you need.

 

3 marks: Student has identified how the author opened their piece (the technique), has employed a quote and has identified how this may position readers.

3 marks: Student has identified how the author has used language and has identified how this may position readers (with textual evidence)

3 marks: Student has analysed the image and how the image has been employed to impact the intended reader.

1 mark: One further persuasive technique has been identified (no analysis required)

 

Contention: Davis contends that school canteens need to phase out the sale of junk food to students to ensure the health and wellbeing of our society.

 

Supporting Argument: The author opens by suggesting that junk food sold in canteens can have a large impact on the health of our students.

 

 

 

Junk food Junkies                       The Age, 15/4/2015

 

To the editor,

I had to call the plumber the other day because my gutters were blocked. He called me out after being on the roof to show me a pile of mouldy sandwiches and rotten fruit. Apparently my son enjoys the taste of salty, fatty, sugary school canteen food more than my healthy sandwiches. Why should public schools be risking our children's health, wellbeing and future (not to mention their pocket money) due to entrenched laziness and small financial gains. Canteens need to remove these offending products for the wellbeing of our entire community.

 

Sue Davis,